The Importance of Choice

When I first began rewriting chunks of Pelegra and the Son of Merek, it was because I was reading a book called The Anatomy of Story by John Trudy.  The book mentioned the importance of the choices that your characters make.  I can’t stress that enough.  Think back over some of the books you have read.  Was the main character given a choice? Was the decision they had to make, obvious?  Where they choosing between one good thing and one bad thing?  Or was it a choice between two good things?  Those are the kind of choices that help shape your character and portray who they are.  When your character has two good options, which one he chooses truly demonstrates  merit of his/her character.

So now I have given my character Aiden a choice.  No, I’m not telling you what it is.  Just know that it’s a big choice.  A choice that could change the lives of many, no matter which way he chooses.

Harry Potter and the Half Blood Prince Movie Release Rant/Review

In case you didn’t already know, I am an avid HP fan.  So my husband and I bought our tickets in advance, waited in line for over three hours, and cheered with the rest of the crowd when the lights finally dimmed and our exuberant wait came to an end.

I have three words for you. Read The Book.  After watching the movie, my husband and I (who was much angrier than I am) think that perhaps all the writers, directors, and executives should have dusted off their copy and given it a reread before proceeding.


Did I think the movie was horrible.  No.  There are some things they did incredibly well.  The acting and the special effects were great!  What has me upset is how much they left out.  Now I understand that they are going to cut things, because they insist on keeping the length to 2.5 hours (which I still think is stupid, after all that’s what intermissions were invented for).  However, I can’t stand it when they’ve cut important things from the book and then put in made up scenes that didn’t happen.

I did like they way they opened it.  They showed, someone being taken from their home (probably one of the murders that the ministers talk about in the beginning) and they showed the brockdale bridge being destroyed.  Okay, that was a pretty cool opening.  But then it skips the ministers (which I expected) and it SKIPS the Dursleys.  So if you really wanted to see Dumbledore lecture them (like I did) then you are out of luck.  Instead, Dumbledore picks an unsuspecting Harry up outside a diner.

Moving on.  He does go to the burrow, but is dropped off and left alone to walk a bit of a distance to the burrow.  Bill and Fluer have been completely cut out of the movie.  O.W.L.s are never discussed.  They show Fred and George’s Joke Shop (barely) and the Trio are wondering around Diagon alley, apparently alone.  No Mr and Mrs Weasley.  No Hagrid.

They do follow Draco (no invisibility cloak–you only see it once throughout the movie) but Draco is accompanied by his mother, Bellatrix, and Fenrir Greyback.  They show Draco looking at the vanishing cabinet–so the Trio know what he is after, they just don’t know why.

They DID show Malfoy breaking Harry’s nose on the train, but then they have Luna find him instead of Tonks.  Snape does NOT take him up to the school and he enters the Great Hall in school uniform.

Potions class was done well, but Defense Against the Dark Arts is never seen.  The school interactions were good and well done for the most part.  They do not show apparition lessons, it’s not even mentioned.  They DO show quidditch tryouts and the first game.

They show Draco in the Room of Requirement working on the cabinet.  Also, house elves never appear in the movie (which I was very upset about).

After Harry uses Sectumsempra on Draco, Snape does not give him detention.  Therefore there is no other quidditch games after the first one that they show, which means Ginny does not kiss him in a crowded common room.  But the kiss still happens, just at a different time.

Ron and Lavendar are hilarious and Ron does get poisoned, as well as dosed with the love potion from Romilda Vane.

Harry goes back to the burrow for Christmas BUT (and this is one thing that gets me mad)  Rufus and Percy don’t appear (at this point you don’t even know that fudge is not the MOM anymore)  Tonks and Lupin are there (obviously a couple–she calls him sweetheart)  and then Death Eaters Attack the Burrow and Harry runs out after them, followed by Ginny and then the entire burrow is set on fire!  Which does not even come close to happening in the book.  I mean, they are leaving so much out and then they put this in.  It didn’t even make any sense.  It doesn’t do anything for the plot except leave you sitting there confused and wondering what on earth they were thinking.

I forgot to mention, they DID do a GREAT job with Katie Bell and the necklace.

They did a good job with the memories that Dumbledore shows Harry, but they left out at least three–one being rather vital–the Badger Cup memory is never seen, nor is it mentioned.

They did Harry retrieving the memory from Slughorn very well.  But when Harry shows it to Dumbledore and they talk about it afterwards—they screwed up, a lot.  Dumbledore never explains what he thinks the other Horcruxes are.  It is not explained why they would have been chosen.  Basically they only thing conveyed is that there are probably 7 horcruxes and 2 have been destroyed.  That’s it.  They even have Dumbledore say something to the effect of “they could be anything” which is not true.  They would not be just anything, as it is explained in the book.

Now we’re getting toward the end.  They did the locket retrieval well, but they left out striking dialogue and embellished certain aspects.

I for one loved the dialogue after Dumbledore drank the potion where he says he is not afraid because he with Harry.  Harry essentially apparates them back into hogsmead (when they left, they apparated Out Of Hogwarts, supposedly Dumbledore has that ability being headmaster).  This does not happen in the movie.  Instead, After the drinking of the potion, Harry goes to get water (he never does get any water to dumbledore) and is attacked by inferi and pulled down into the lake.  Then flames erupt in the water before him and we see Dumbledore wielding a storm of fire (this actually looked amazing.)  Then after Harry climbs out of they water Dumbledore apparates them into the tower at Hogwarts. At this point there is NO dark mark above the school and Madame Rosemerta is not even mentioned.

Harry doesn’t share the Felix potion with his friends before leaving with Dumbledore.

There is NO battle in the school.

Harry is not petrified under the invisibility cloak

He is hiding under the floor or something like that.

Snape does kill Dumbledore.  That scene is Incredibly well done.

Bellatrix is the one who now sets the dark mark over the school.

The death eaters then flee and harry chases after, it is revealed that Snape is the half blood prince.  Bellatrix sets Hagrid’s hut on fire (apparently it must have been empty because no one comes out)  and they get away.

At this point, because there is no battle, Bill has not been attacked by Fenir.  No one is aware that Snape killed Dumbledore, except for Harry.

Harry goes back to the school and a crowd is gathered around Dumbledore but nobody says anything. They all raise their wands and make the dark mark disperse.  That’s about it.

The trio talk a little bit in a tower somewhere.  Hermoine makes it clear they are going to accompany them.  But they don’t talk about the fact they have several Horcruxes to find.  He doesn’t break up with Ginny.  And the biggest issue (my husband was very upset about this)  They DO NOT SHOW DUMBLEDORE’S FUNERAL.

The ending was very anti climatic and could have been done better.

When the movie ended, we were all left there sitting, expecting more, and then the credits started rolling.  A smattering of applause sounded (no where near matching the cheers at the beginning) and we filed out, disheartened.

Overall it was ok.  Will I watch it again?  Probably, yes, because I’ll buy the dvd since I own the first five.  What they did put in from the book (and when they bothered to do it correctly) was very, very good.  But what they left out and what they chose to make up and add affected the movie, in a very negative way.

So, again, my point is, READ THE BOOK, because the movie doesn’t come anywhere near doing it justice and will probably leave you more confused than wanting for more.

I truly hope that they do not butcher the last book the way they did this one.


Search Engine Problems and General Maintenance.

Well I did get the archived pages removed from google, but then the description that pops up is really odd and pulling from my good reads feed. So I’ve added more meta tags to hopefully (crossing fingers) take care of that.

In case you were wondering, yes this site has been built and maintained by me with the help of wordpress themes and plug ins. So if you see something wrong, mistyped a broken link, or whatever, contact me and I’ll do my best to get it fixed.

I also got the subscription links fixed and now offer a subscription by email option.

Well, back to writing.

~keep reading

Conference Ready

Hello!

I’m sorry I haven’t posted in awhile.  I had a few things pop up in my personal life that took precedence.  I should be back on schedule to at least post once a week.

Well, the conference is coming up.  If you don’t know what I’m talking about then go to www.willamettewriters.com and click the conference link.  Great organization and fabulous conference.  It’s a great experience.  Anyway, where was I?  Oh yes, if you are going and maybe this is your first time or maybe not I highly recommend that you read a series of posts that Mary Andonian did.  They can be found here: http://writersontherise.wordpress.com/?s=mary+andonian.  Be sure and scroll all the way down; she did several posts.  They are all on conference success and being prepared for pitching.  They helped me immensely last year and I’m sure you’ll find them useful too.

The Writers On The Rise blog, which is where the articles are,  has lots of other great posts too, and it  is run  by Christina Katz.

That’s all for now, have to get back to my final touches before the conference.  I’ll be pitching Pelegra, my young adult fantasy book, well series actually.  There are four books planned.

~Happy Editing

Sick

well I didn’t make it to work and am now home nursing a pissed off stomach. I’ll spare you the details. I really hate being sick. 🙁

Morning Rant and Some Writing Tidbits

Something I do every so often is run my name through search engines to make sure my website is coming. Primarily my concern is google. I type in my name see that my site pops up and call it good. Well this time I clicked on the link and boy was I surprise (and frustrated and irritated and generally grrrr) when it brought up a very old and crappy “cached” version of my site. What I don’t get is I rebuilt my site I made sure to have google re-crawl my site, but it still didn’t update it, which is rather bizarre. So now I’ve learned to insert noarchive meta tags into the head and I’ve contacted google to remove the offending cached page. So hopefully by next week it will be updated. So on to more pleasant things…writing. I am working in a new scene for Pelegra which is going quite well and I’m very pleased with. No, this one will not show up here, but I believe with enough persistence it will someday–preferably soon–end up in print. I am also so excited for the Willamette Writers conference that I can’t stand it. I met some great people last year, whom I still stay in contact with. If you have never gone to a conference and been surrounded by other people as in love with writing as you are then you are seriously missing out. Even if you can only attend for one day (which is what I did last year) it is so worth your time, money,and effort. I recommend this particular conference to anyone in the northwest or out of the northwest if you are willing to travel. Well I have to go to work now. ~Keep Reading

Busy Weekend

Hi Everyone,

Sorry that I didn’t get a post up this last weekend, but I was busy fixing my car. It decided last week that it did not want to start so I spent the weekend testing all of the electrical components of the ignitions system with an multimeter and a spark tester. My husband helped me change the distributor cap and rotor; the spark plug wires; and the spark plugs. That fixed it. Oh, for any other financially strapped writers out there. The site that I use to help me fix my car is www.alldatadiy.com You do have to pay for a subscription (it’s yearly, for around $30) but it’s been worth every penny for me. Anyway, I suppose I am way off topic. Back to writing. Well, I have the new beginning. I have just a few more tweaks and then I’ll put it up. I’m very pleased with it. I am rewriting large chunks and am very happy with how it’s going. Well, I have to get to work, more later.
~Keep Reading.

Pebbles and Pickles

If you have checked out the links to pictures of my dogs you will know that I have a brown and white Lhasa Apso named Pebbles. Well I felt the need to share with you all just how peculiar she is. You see Pebbles LOVES dill pickles. Vlassic kosher dills to be exact. Our other dogs sniff at a piece of pickle and turn their heads away. Or sassy might try and eat one but typically just spits it out. Pebbles on the other hand loves dill pickles. It’s hilarious. I’ll have to try and take a picture of her eating pickles. Anyway, I know this is really random but I felt the need to share. ~Keep Reading

Never Underestimate Your Local Library

A common bit of advice I’ve heard from just about every agent/editor/writer/etc that I’ve come in contact with is: to become a better writer, one must READ.  Now for me, that is easy.  I often read more than one book at a time.  I also like to reread books and series.   So even if I am not posting reviews, you can safely bet that I am reading something.  I know your are probably thinking, get to the point already.  Well the point is go the library.  Yes, I recommend a quick trip to your local bookstore too, but if you are like me and trying to pinch pennies, then the library just might become your new best friend.  The library closest to me works like this:  If you are an in town resident you get a free “advanced” card.  Out of town residents have to pay 60 dollars per household per year for an “advanced” card.  OR you can have a “basic” card where you can have one item out and one item on hold.  That is what my husband and I both currently have.  I’m digressing from my point aren’t I?

Bear with me a little longer. When I was in college at Linfield, they have something called Summit/WorldCat as part of the library.  WorldCat bye the way is short for world catalog and not some clever name derived from Linfield’s mascot, the wildcat (yes I actually thought that up until two days ago–feel free to laugh hysterically at me–I won’t mind.)

I just found out that my local public library also has access to Summit/Worldcat.  You just have to ask the librarian for an inter library loan form because it is not on their website and it is not really advertised or explained on their website.  I happened upon this information accidentally and then called the library and was told about the form.

So now I have access to a vast array of books I had  been pinning over.

So my point is to talk to your librarians and to never underestimate your library.  So go find a good book!

~keep reading

World Building

Well I’ve been fleshing out Pelegra even more.  If you know me, then you know that I like to research, well just about everything, so I found a couple of cool sites that seem like they might be helpful.

The web writer one specifically deals with developing a fantasy world.  The second one has links to others.  So in my endeavor to make my book better, I am writing a deeper history ( I already did one) of the world and an atlas/encylcopedia type thing of what and who is in it.  In the long run (seeing as this is a four book series) I think it will help.